I absolutely loved reading this short story Leon! You have such an amazing imagination. As I was reading your story, especially towards the end, I wondered if you had got hurt attempted to back flip and I was starting to worry, but I am glad it all turned out ok in the end. :)
I loved your use of similes throughout this story. I especially liked “shot me speeding towards the sky like a rocket being launched”. I also thought your use of dialog in this story made it seem more real. Well done!
What was your inspiration for this story? It sounds like a great story to be written into a movie one day! I would definitely love to see that!
An illustration (drawing) for this story would have given in just another added wow factor! If you have time, we would definitely love to see an illustration to go with this story.
ReplyDeleteHi Leon,
I absolutely loved reading this short story Leon! You have such an amazing imagination. As I was reading your story, especially towards the end, I wondered if you had got hurt attempted to back flip and I was starting to worry, but I am glad it all turned out ok in the end. :)
I loved your use of similes throughout this story. I especially liked “shot me speeding towards the sky like a rocket being launched”. I also thought your use of dialog in this story made it seem more real. Well done!
What was your inspiration for this story? It sounds like a great story to be written into a movie one day! I would definitely love to see that!
An illustration (drawing) for this story would have given in just another added wow factor! If you have time, we would definitely love to see an illustration to go with this story.
Ka pai Leon! Keep it up!
Leisha
:)